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:There's nothing wrong with what's there now, with the exception of "with Miho as the commander due to her experiences. Miho and her friends commandeer the Panzer IV with her as the commander" which is three repetitions of "command" in much too short a space. [[User:Evil Tim|Evil Tim]] ([[User talk:Evil Tim|talk]]) 10:41, 1 January 2015 (EST) | :There's nothing wrong with what's there now, with the exception of "with Miho as the commander due to her experiences. Miho and her friends commandeer the Panzer IV with her as the commander" which is three repetitions of "command" in much too short a space. [[User:Evil Tim|Evil Tim]] ([[User talk:Evil Tim|talk]]) 10:41, 1 January 2015 (EST) | ||
::Fixed it, sentence seems more cohesive now.[[User:Inceptor57|Inceptor57]] ([[User talk:Inceptor57|talk]]) 11:02, 1 January 2015 (EST) | |||
Revision as of 16:02, 1 January 2015
Introduction
Hi, thanks for sharing this piece of Japanese culture with us. I see the page is still 'under construction' but you may want to shorten the introduction a bit. The focus of this page is guns, not really on explaining the complete storyline, this can be found on pages like IMDB.com etc. How about below, where I took your text, deleted most lines but still keep an interesting story? PeeWee055 (talk) 10:36, 1 January 2015 (EST)
Girl Und Panzer is an anime series taking place in alternate reality where tankery has become a form of sport. Sensha-dō, meaning the "way of the tank", has risen in popularity among women and has been running since the 1920s.
Enter Miho Nishizumi, a new transfer student to the Ōarai Girls' Academy. Coming from a family of distinguished Sensha-dō tradition, Miho and her friends commandeer the Panzer IV with her as the commander, Saori as the communicator, Hana as the gunner, Yukari as the loader, and Mako as the driver.
With the team organized, the biggest challenge now awaits Miho, bringing the no-name school of Ōarai into the championship of the 63rd National High School Sensha-Doō Tournament against other high-tier schools!
- There's nothing wrong with what's there now, with the exception of "with Miho as the commander due to her experiences. Miho and her friends commandeer the Panzer IV with her as the commander" which is three repetitions of "command" in much too short a space. Evil Tim (talk) 10:41, 1 January 2015 (EST)
- Fixed it, sentence seems more cohesive now.Inceptor57 (talk) 11:02, 1 January 2015 (EST)